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Tripp'ncutie
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since 2008-05-05
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minnasota

0 posted 2008-05-05 03:13 PM



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The picture on the wall speaks
tears threatening a life
The thin plate glass window holding
a raging river

An angel's broken wings
night's shadow
cast upon a tear stained cheek
a memory of tomorrow
that may never be
a faded picture
not taken
sits on the wall

Gasping for air
not yet drowning
i can't breathe

you used to be my drug
a best friend
still the one i run to
a storm i wanted to stay in

waiting in,
shadows of light
breaking my wings
frozen in flight

your voice lingers
after the dial tone

[This message has been edited by Tripp'ncutie (05-06-2008 08:44 AM).]

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krad008
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since 2008-02-20
Posts 82

1 posted 2008-05-05 05:03 PM


jeeez this is a complex poem. I think I get the jist of it but ca n you explain the beginning to me some more plz
Tripp'ncutie
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since 2008-05-05
Posts 73
minnasota
2 posted 2008-05-06 08:46 AM


alright hopfully the better first line explains some. see its about my best friend/ex bf.
Britt_Brat
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since 2008-03-05
Posts 37
Knoxville, TN
3 posted 2008-05-06 02:31 PM


wow this is what im currently going through i know how you feel

Is it to be true that you would hurt me

Britt_Brat
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since 2008-03-05
Posts 37
Knoxville, TN
4 posted 2008-05-06 02:33 PM


i love it. i love the fact i can read sumthing and know what that person was or is going through

Is it to be true that you would hurt me

hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
5 posted 2008-05-06 06:55 PM


great write!! and welcome to pip!

JJ

wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
Posts 224
the last place on earth
6 posted 2008-05-06 07:45 PM


welcome to pip, great poem but it feels like there should be more... or is it just me??

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

hunnie_girl
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7 posted 2008-05-11 02:31 AM


Welcome to Passions Tes
i like this great 1st post
hope to read more
Krysti

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