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Teen Poetry #8

My first fall

spiderilia
Junior Member

since 2008-04-24

Posts 21
Israel

0 posted 2008-05-03 02:08 PM

My first fall

first time in my life, I give in
first time when I feel I've been beaten
Im walking on ice, thats so thin
Im living a drama I've written

I can not forgive myself, no
I can not forget you, Im sorry
I havent been there for too long
there's no happy end in this story

I missed my chance being with you
I can not correct this, Im falling
Im dreaming about you, its true
I still have some faith, Im still calling

not easy to let it all die
some strength left inside ,I have seen
and I can still fight, thats not lie
first time in my life, I give in...

I think that this is one of the best things Ive written about the way Im feeling now, and I really hope you all like it...

imsimplyme
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 16
California

1 posted 2008-05-04 01:11 AM

i know where your coming from, this is a really good poem. i like the ended the best.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-05-05 08:37 AM

Aw this one's sad. I: know how you feel. I've been there.. Great write!

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

spiderilia
Junior Member

since 2008-04-24

Posts 21
Israel

3 posted 2008-05-06 06:37 AM

thanks...
"this one is sad"
almost all of my poems are sad....=)

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