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spiderilia
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since 2008-04-24
Posts 21
Israel

0 posted 2008-05-01 10:24 AM


Her eyes

her eyes...
hide down the truth,
when she is telling me her lies

her eyes...
are shining like a fire,
well she's the prettiest of all the fireflies

her eyes...
they make me fly,
so high right when I see her smiles

her eyes...
they make me feel so bad,
I want to die just when i see her cries.

her eyes...
I look at them,
and all I wanna is to tie bough of our lives.

so if she'll ask:
"what is so beautifull about me, that he all the time describes?"
Ill answer with no doubt, those are
her eyes,
her eyes,
her eyes...

waiting for your replies...

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
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Neverland
1 posted 2008-05-01 05:41 PM


I absolutly Love it. This is such a sweet poem, and it sounds just like some one I know. A lovely, fantastic write that is going in my library.

     {~~*~~}

{&]ebbing.away.from*my.pain.}}
{~Emily~}

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since 2008-01-31
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2 posted 2008-05-01 08:20 PM


Spiderillia. Every time i read your poems, i absolutely like your poems even more! you have a special way with words. This poem is deffenently going to my library! Great Job!!

~Zach~



spiderilia
Junior Member
since 2008-04-24
Posts 21
Israel
3 posted 2008-05-03 01:42 PM


thanks for the good replies... Ill keep writting as long as youll keep reading...
imsimplyme
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since 2008-04-01
Posts 16
California
4 posted 2008-05-05 01:34 PM


really good poem, it made me think of someone i know.

cant wait to read more from you

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