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masksrlife
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since 2008-03-26
Posts 109
Canada

0 posted 2008-04-27 03:50 PM


( hey guys this poem was like my first ever poem I found it on my computer so its not tottally a good poem!:P but i hope maybe some one will enjoy it i know its not my favorite tho.)


I once drew a picture of us together
two smiles drawn perfecty across our faces
but that picture is long gone
this the only memory that we have
that isnt crushed. That isnt full
of hate and betrayal.
The smiles were turned
the tears were drawn
and now time can only tell what will
happen now. To me. To you.
The picture ripped perfectly in half
a invisible line drawn between you and me.
Between our heart.
Now on those two seprete peices of paper,
now on those two seperate live's
there's splats of blood and drops from
tears.
Those will be the last breaths I take.
And the last words I say will be.
"Please take me back"
Than the room will hush to silence.
And my pounding heart with will be
dead,

*-crazycece-*

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Ri
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since 2008-02-01
Posts 67
Blackburn, England
1 posted 2008-04-27 03:52 PM


It may not be your best poem, yet it remains excellent, a great concept
Tripp'ncutie
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since 2008-05-05
Posts 73
minnasota
2 posted 2008-05-06 08:02 PM


feeling the emotion realating rather to closly to something with me. heh nice job though really saw the, heart and picture in it.
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