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spiderilia
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0 posted 2008-04-27 02:27 PM


hi all... hope some of you will be able to relate to those... I know that the topic is kind of the same but juxt couldn't decide which oe is better so I post them both...  

I remember

I remember the era before
thinking about you for the first time.
I remember the era before
putting frustration of mine, in a rhyme

I remeber that era,
every day was the same
I was dreaming of money
I was dreaming of fame

like a shadow you came
that in breath disappier
all my inside had frozen
you have filled me with fear

I was thinking about you
I did not lose your sight
I was cryin of shame
I was crying at night

All my life had just fallen
what I thought wasn't true
only thing still have meanin for me
only one, this is you...


Moment

who am I to be rude?
who am I to complane?
just  broken sad man,
who was dreaming, in vain

why did you gave me hope?
why the hell you're so cruel?
maybe there is no love?
to brake hearts is your rule

I had you for a moment
that had passed, so Im sad
just a breath taking moment
happiest moment I've had...


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1 posted 2008-04-27 10:28 PM


Honestly I do't think these two poems are much alike. I like the first one is better. Great write anyway!!

~Zach~



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