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justanotherstorm
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0 posted 2008-04-21 03:50 PM


thats not really the title but yea


if u ever do me wrong
dont worry i'll be strong
i'll deal wit whatever you put me through
cuz baby i'm in love wit you
every night i cry
cuz without you
i'm weak
i feel like i'm about ta die
please give me some time ta confess
dont put me under stress
i wanna be with you

i'm running outta time
so the next time i see you
imma tell you that im still
in love wit you

umm this is kinda just ran outta my mouth or was it my mind well yea

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rebelangelv
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1 posted 2008-04-21 10:52 PM


this was great. good job :]


if u ever do me wrong
dont worry i'll be strong
i'll deal wit whatever you put me through
cuz baby i'm in love wit you

best stanza :] great rhyme.

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

justanotherstorm
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2 posted 2008-04-21 11:58 PM


thnx V i made it today
it just came out sorta

rebelangelv
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3 posted 2008-04-22 12:04 PM


it was good. song or poem?

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

justanotherstorm
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4 posted 2008-04-22 06:42 PM


idk yet i might make it into a song iono maybe
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