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masksrlife Member
since 2008-03-26
Posts 109Canada |
I sit here in the dark like a dull garden tool nobody knows why im there or why im made just sitting here all alone every one would be beter off with out me with out my face to look at every morning with out my eyes to stare into and think why me why do i have to call her mine? Why does she have to be the one I say i love you, when i clearly dont or touch her hand so lightly with mine. All they think is that im a beast. That im no person to share your love with. And i respect that. I respect that we can never be. So for your own good. WEre over. WEre done. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I love this!!! great structure flow everything!... I have been in this situation before. i think you are doing the right thing.. when you dont love someone. No matter how much it hurts them. Its hurting you too. and in the end its going to hurt twice as much if you keep trying thinking you might start loving them. great poem! Krysti |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
oh and btw.. no one is better off without you.. there is always someone that loves you and needs you here! |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wow loved the poem and WELCOME TO PIP!!! now that I have that off my chest, I'm agreed people need people. You might feel useless worthless ect but others don't see you that way. Your parents probably love you, and if they say they do I'd take their word for it. If you have friends, they need you as well and if they're exeptionaly close they might even love you. This poem was amazing and got me thinking so Good work and Good Luck! "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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masksrlife Member
since 2008-03-26
Posts 109Canada |
hey thanx guyz! I really dont like most of my poems like this one but it shows so much of what i feel and whats happend to me so i posted it lol but yeah thanx again! ANd i know im loved but some times it feels that im not! |
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masksrlife Member
since 2008-03-26
Posts 109Canada |
o and thanks for the welcome i really love it here |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
NIce write!! finally your on the site lol see ya soon JJ |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Welcome to Passions! I liked how you portrayed the feeling of being isolated. I also liked the strength of the tone in your poem. Dawn gives birth to a new day. |
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masksrlife Member
since 2008-03-26
Posts 109Canada |
When i started writing poems i didnt think any one would acctrually like it im really suprised i love every one here there all so awesome! And really thanx for the complements! |
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