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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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0 posted 2008-03-21 09:49 PM



When You Were Young

Can’t you remember
When you were young
And nothing mattered
Except for the sun

Everything was simple
Feelings rarely got hurt
And nobody minded
If you laid in the dirt

So you got a little time
Have you chosen the past
The memories there
Have not long to last

Some things you may
Never ever forget
Others, forever,
You’ll learn to regret

So live a little backwards
For an hour or two
And live the moments over
That made you you

Don’t you remember
When you were young
Forever was so short
It proffered a run

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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1 posted 2008-03-22 01:30 PM


ohhh Kate Darlin' how I miss those times......... like everyday of this awful old peopple life haha.. btw great poem great flow love it!!!
Krysti

Earl Robertson
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2 posted 2008-03-27 06:45 PM


Beautiful, a wonderful warm read!
I loved this, a happy poem but with a dark undercurrent. Headed to my library

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

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fromme2U
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3 posted 2008-03-27 06:53 PM


Awww I loved it and it sent me back tracking my memory lane.
hiddensmiles
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4 posted 2008-03-27 11:16 PM


great write!!
xbrokenxlullabyx
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5 posted 2008-03-29 09:01 PM


i love the line "forever was so short"

but i wonder whether it is true. when we were young forever was..... endless. forever didn't have a limit because when we heard "forver" it was usually our mom "i'll love you forever"

now if we hear that, when is it ever a long time? there's a song lyric "forever's gonna start tonight" but in most relationships these days forver doesn't mean much. idk just a thought

i lvoed the poem though

Susanna V.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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6 posted 2008-04-02 09:58 PM


forever- doesn't seem so long ago . . . isn't that in a song or something, i think barry manilow (yea, i know an oldies- but a good oldies) lol. love you all thanks for the coments and stimulating thoughts. been gone for a while hopefully i'll be strong and fresh with my new rest and lack of writer's block . . . lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Jaki H
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7 posted 2008-04-10 09:24 AM


oh my gosh!!! i love this!!! the rhyme scheme is amazing and its just overall really good. i. love. it.
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