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rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
Posts 538
usa

0 posted 2008-03-07 09:45 PM


ok this is soooooooooo old so yea.
dont think this is about u Now, cuz it aint.


youre falling apart
and theres no where to go
im sorry that im no where near
find someone else to hold

you rejected us
so eventually we'll reject you
sorry babe thats how it is
its time you faced the truth

youre all on your own now
but isnt that what you wanted?
youre left with the curse of remembrace
with all your mistakes you are taunted

did you know that this would happen?
because all i did was warn
everyone could see it coming
but you ignored us, and now your heart is torn

not only are you hurt cause
you didnt heed us when we warned
but now youre doomed because God said
that sodom and gomorrah is better than those that scorn

oh wait hold up
youre just like them anyway
your selling off your body
and only acting gay

yep...i think im done trying now
trying to make you see
of all the mistakes youve made in your life
so... good luck without me

then only reason i kept on
for as long as i freaking did
was because i knew no one else cared
but you keep pushing away like a little immature kid

if you want help
like everyone knows you need
then you can come on your own
and then ask help from me

but why bother with the effort
its easier to sit back and see
you screw up again and again
and then i get to see you scream!
(and/or bleed)

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

© Copyright 2008 leah nelson - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
1 posted 2008-03-07 11:23 PM


I love this Leah, I envy your talent. I think bleed is better at the end.. but thats my personal opinion.. Great Write..
justanotherstorm
Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321

2 posted 2008-03-08 12:30 PM


wow i wonder who ur talking about
well being alone can be lonely but maybe its what the person needs talking to God and no one else is all they need to be set free just what i think

rebelangelv
Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538
usa
3 posted 2008-03-08 01:22 AM


revenge: thanks!!! u make me feel special. and thanx for the suggestion, i put it up there waiting for people to respond so yeah! u rock!

justanotherstorm: sarcasim much. u have a point there...except...well u know God disagrees. ill show u all the verses if u like. but yea no, he says that u need fellowship and guidance to come (or come back) to God. but u know, this person doesnt want to come back, so it really wouldnt help to leave em alone n e way. besides God commands us not to leave our hurting siblings alone, instead to come beside them( ill show u all those too if u want)

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

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