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XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-03-02 05:24 PM

Sparkling grey
is the water so deep,
shmmering at the
bottom lies my life in a heap.
No one sees how
badly I hurt,
they'll only give me
gracios smiles

I want them to see, but
yet for them to leave me
alone. Leave me here to dine
on this feast of sorrow
Polished with regret, that
will save me from tomorrow.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-03-02 08:49 PM

hmm in this poem what are you? cuz it doesnt sound like your human.. honestly i thought you were a fish or something lol. but i might be wrong right?

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-03-02 09:11 PM

ROLFLMHO!! ....HAHHAA! no, i'm not a fish, ...lmao. ahahaha! thats a good one. Umm...no is it just the part about the water that confused you? I think it's supposed to resemble everything that a person goes through or just life it's self,

shimmering grey is the water so deep,
down at the bottom lies my life in a heap...-that would be like someone saying,
Looking through all of the crap in this world i see my life, way down there at the bottom. Being crushed my the weeight of everything else and just being alone. lol sorry i confused u! .....lmao...haha a fish!...

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

3 posted 2008-03-02 09:15 PM

I know what your talking about. (Unless your a fish or somthing like that lol)
Exelent poem. I'm sorry and hope you're better.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-03-02 11:39 PM

ohhhhhhhhh okay!!! ROTFL!! i still think its better if you a fish lol!! cuz then the less intellegent people *like me* would find it easier to understand this poem. but the poems orgional messeage is good too! good job!

~Zach~

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-03-03 05:37 PM

Hahahaha, thank you both...

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

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