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Teen Poetry #8

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XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-02-29 06:13 PM

{~~*~~}

Frightend of what used
to be me, scared that's what
is coming back. Like an
uncontrolable sickness,
spredding it's way through
my heart.

I thought I was done with
this, all these thoughts.
All I can remember is how
it fadded everything else
out, how for a second,
everything was fine. Don't
let me be taken away, I don't
need this pain to keep me
alive.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Broken Toy
Junior Member

since 2008-02-29

Posts 18
ThatSmallWorldCalledInsanity

1 posted 2008-02-29 06:32 PM

The words just lept off the page, it's like there's a window to the truth and you looked through it. I loved the line "Don't let me be taken away" it sums up the entire feeling of lonliness, emptyness and pain that the poem talks about. Love the style keep it up, definately be looking at some of your other works ^^

I am a broken toy,
Of no use to anyone,
But if you fix me up,
I'm sure we'll have some fun.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-02-29 06:42 PM

awe, thank you so much. I'm really glad you liked it.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

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