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Do you think I'd just forget?
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Do you think I'd just forget? |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
This poem was straight from my heart at least whats left of it and i thank all that enjoy destroying someones confidence and emotions so many times..... ------------------------------------------------- My mind is going crazy It seems I've gotten lazy The world is turning I see so many bodies burning. The depth of the water is continuing to grow I'm not your pet nor your show Why do I suffer because of your lies Was it on purpose that wouldn't be a surprise Times are changing with every moment Why do you hate,Why do you torment Just open your eyes,Life is beautiful You refuse to accept that, You are the cause of my funeral Ashes to ashes,Burn by burn, My skin melts away Forgetfulness is not contagious, try not to rub it on me anyway You said you wou would change, I've yet to see it I look at you, now you disgust me till i spit Difference,similarity, they are so close But yet so far away,Do you think I'm acting dead, I cannot pose You say you love me But why do you lie,now I'm horribly ugly To myself i ask "what did i do to deserve this" Did you tell me was it something i missed My death clock is ending, don't forget I'm still watching you without a sweat Bye for now,I'll see you soon.................. ~-Keagan-~ |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
great poem. i know your depressed keagan *although you lie and say your not* but besides that. have you tryed talking to anyone? if you need to talk you know im always near to give advise or if you just want to vent. i dont mind. also not to be a pest but one of your stanzas was off on the whole rhyming scheme. just pointing that out incase you missed it.  ~Zach~ |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Keagan, please let people help you. I know how you feel but thats just it...you don't believe me. If you want to talk email me...and if this is about one particular person GET AWAY FROM THEM!!! Life is beautiful so take your own advise. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
ummm...i dont have alot to say about the poem but, Zach not to offend you or anything but I don't think ya should have said what you did. So what if he is depressed? as long as he's talking to someone. I just personally wouldn't of announced that. but we all are different. And Earl's got a very good point, he's a wise person. (that last statement was directer towards Keagan, hehe) Good poem though. FoReVeRbRokEn |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
im sorry about the comment keagan.. i was just frusterated.. i didnt mean to offened. i just hope your talking to someone about your situation... hope your doing better.. and once again im sorry.. really i am... |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
Emotion filled post xoxoxoxox- Star |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
All I can say is "LOVE IT!" Great job. |
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RedNail Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 65Stockholm, Sweden |
Wonderful and emotional poem, reminds me of the song "life is beautiful" by Sixx: A.M. Life is a rollercoster, live for the ride. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Keagan, From A Person who is been in Zach's situation your making this ten million time worse, weather your angry or not. You can not and should not say the stuff for him. You make it sound that being depressed is the end of the world.. NO IT ISNt i still battle depression and it's nothing to be ashamed of.. I would also like too tell you that instead of critisising Zach the way you have been these last few days.. BE HIS MATE.. and a mate DOESN'T PORTRAY A MATE.. Zach, Know how your feeling hun.. It isn't easy being depressed and u may say your not but you can see by the words in your poems. Depression is nothing too be ashamed of.. Fall back on your mates in your time of need.. They together will rise you above the demons and terechary of this world. Drop me a line on MSN If you want to talk! feral_til_death@hotmail.com Forever There Is Faith, Jess xx |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
very Emotional ARCTIC WIND |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
jess..... i dont know how u figure this. but this isnt about zach, zach is a great friend and i would never say anything like this to him..........this is about people and events that have caused me emotional problems..... like being an outcast and losing my dad......just emotions that kill my self esteem and confidence........ ~-Keagan-~ |
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