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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois 
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No one cares, No one see's Whats that called? *oh yeah* invisablity No one see's, No one say Why do I care anyway? People ignore, they don't see Whats going on inside of me. A love burning passion as hot as the sun Maybe a sesitive guy who wants to have fun? But that won't happen, they can't see What can happen, What can be... People ignore, they don't see Cause I am invisablity ~Zach~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
No one should be mean to anyone! Good Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
umm invisiblity sounds pretty nice . . . well, to me. and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i like the last line. i like the thought of embodying invisibility as opposed to just being invisible. on a critiquing side, i would check to make sure that the phrases are complete thoughts, some portions sounded incomplete. good effort though. keep writing and learning. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Well invisability I hear you at any rate! This is an awesome poem! Keep it up...and know your heard. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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