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crimsonXnails
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since 2008-02-10
Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

0 posted 2008-02-23 11:59 AM


i  guess  i  just never erned it, your love i mean.
you were  always  beside me, helping,"loving" me
when you needed  someone i was waiting there,
but you  pushed  my love away, regected me,
needed something, someone to hold on to.
you chose darkness,cold ike your heart.
as you fell, you screamed for help,
but you never let me close enough,
to catch you, before you hit.
you knew the consequenses,
you    ran   away,   you
would not openthe doors
for a caring begger,
trying   to   get
closer,   just
close  enough
to grab your
hand before
you slip
to far
a
w
a
y

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

© Copyright 2008 Tracey - All Rights Reserved
Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
1 posted 2008-02-23 12:27 PM


wow, i like this alot. and i mean alot.
Falling rain
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since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois
2 posted 2008-02-23 03:05 PM


Not to be annoying but you got alot of spelling errors. lol i like the meaning to your poem. very good! keep it up!

~Zach~

Dark Star
Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392
Lost in your eyes
3 posted 2008-02-23 03:16 PM


good read

xoxoxox-star

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2008-02-24 10:07 AM


Full Emotion here,,

ARCTIC WIND

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