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Amic Junior Member
since 2008-02-17
Posts 39...I think Im lost again... |
I know its probably not the best.. but criticism is welcome! ? ! When the wind blows, and whispers to you, As you listen to the singing of the trees Remember The One Who Whispers your name! When you watch the Sunset and the beauty engulfs you, as you hear the River roar! Remember He is captivated by your beauty! Do you see the Mountains in the clouds? Go and feel the rain on your skin! And as you do Listen, He is whipsering to you "I Love you this MUCH!" ~Amic~ |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
wow this is amazing! i love the emotion and detales to this poem. When i finished reading this i was like "Wow!". i can't wait to see more of your work. And welcome to PIP. Hi im Zach! lol ~Zach~ |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
ooh! welcome to PIP!!!! good poem! Is it about G-d or am i going crazy? anyway, its good, keep up the good work! welcome to the one place on earth where you can write as many poems as you like and noone will think your crazy! -Jaki H  |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
oh wow beautiful- this piece was incredible! -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Amic Junior Member
since 2008-02-17
Posts 39...I think Im lost again... |
Thank you all! It is about God, and although I am not quite done exploring this site looks awesome so far! ~Amic~ |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
yea i quickly noticed it was about god. very good poem! ~Zach~ |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wonderful. Welcome to PiP. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
very good!! ... and welcome to pip... god is an amazing thing to write about...good choice!! [This message has been edited by hiddensmiles (02-19-2008 07:37 PM).] |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow! great fist post.. of corse like alway i replied to the wrong post first haha i always do that ger!! hehe n e waiz again Welcome To Passions  Krysti |
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