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Teen Poetry #8

Its Always You, All The Time

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-02-18 06:10 AM

its always the same sad story
from yesterday
that always makes you want
to feel this way
but dont let go now

you dont have to be perfect
all the time
you dont have to get it right
on your first try

you try so hard
just to fall down
and you dont care
as long as you have a crowd

its always you
all the time
and its hard
trying to make it right
we cant give up
we cant lose this fight
as you fall down

and now here you are
with the bottle in your hand
forgetting about who you are
you bury yourself inside the sand

I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

1 posted 2008-02-18 10:42 AM

hey,This is a great poem, i liked it alot!, and its a shame no one else has replied to it.
Also (sorry to be a retard but,) you have a spelling error somewhere in the first stanza but overall great poem!

--Keagan

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-02-18 03:14 PM

wow this is great. and Keagan im commenting on this so yeah. (ur not the only one...) its a sad topic to be writing about but things like this happen all the time. right? Great job!! oh and Keagan he has no spelling errors in the first stanza. just pointing that out lol

~Zach~

"Nice guys finish last"

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-02-19 12:44 PM

Wow Bryan, this wuz amazing!!! I always love coming back from being away for awhile and reading one of your poems... such a nice flow.. always
Krysti

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