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Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada

0 posted 2008-02-15 06:51 PM


This is how broken hearts begin
With ones so whole and clear
As I see her her heart in pain
I'd break mine to be near

I would cut out my own heart
I'd bleed from every pore
If I could take her pain within
Free it, feel it as My sin

Is this what the preacher means?
Is this simple Chistian love?
If so I'll kneel today and pray
Pray she feels our love


"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

[This message has been edited by Earl Robertson (02-15-2008 08:34 PM).]

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crimsonXnails
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since 2008-02-10
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1 posted 2008-02-15 07:08 PM


hey hey,
  thanx for the reply! i love urs to it sounds like we sort of have the same situation. we both have trouble reaching from an aching heart to touch another. please tell me if i'm way off base, it's your life, and your poem. it just touched me, maybe not the way u intended, but perfect for me any way. thank you.
  !Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

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2 posted 2008-02-15 07:50 PM


Wow Earl this is amazing!! i love this! i understand the feeling your feeling. Its hard to help someone else when they dont noticed that your trying to help them. (idk if that relates to your poem. i thought it did but i dont think it does lol) great write!!

~Zach~

"From the ashes, flowers will bloom
The empty void, fills the room"

Lordadon
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since 2008-02-14
Posts 18
Singapore
3 posted 2008-02-15 09:14 PM


it's like trying to feel the same hurt just to empathise with her to let her know, but she doesnt know it yet. good one earl!=]
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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4 posted 2008-02-15 10:25 PM


ummm your words mirror me, my actions, my intentions. i've done this so many times before. man- do we need counsiling or what?!? earl, my friend, we make a very heartwretching pair of friends.

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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