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young_blood
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0 posted 2008-02-14 05:33 PM


Red Light, Green Light (Formerly Safety and Laterally Death)

The sweating street is bleeding
luminescent green through the deepest cuts.
Sometimes
a terrifying red,
or prophetic yellow
transition the chills along this
damp road.
If I could stay and sweeten
the scene then I would be here all night,
however my heart is nearly spent.
I'm nearly
spent.
No amount of walking will slow the
repetitious flow of colored blood.
Soon, I am washed in a wave of yellow,
bathing in the silent prophet's sacrifice
for life, but that passes onto that color of love.
The stop sign for cupid,
the end of all roads,
safety. I can cross safely, but I
stand
still. Until the moment passes and headlights
rush, I'm bathed in greed, eagerly remembering moments of life.
Green means go.

© Copyright 2008 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-02-14 06:40 PM


eh i was sort of lost at some parts of this poem. the disciption is great but the meaning of this, like what u were trying to say, left me utter confused. please explain??
young_blood
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2 posted 2008-02-14 06:52 PM


The end gives it away my dear. I am standing in the intersection with the light green and headlights coming at me... The end is assumed.
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3 posted 2008-02-14 08:15 PM


Brilliance yet again young_blood. Acctualy one of my favorites of yours. The imagery is absolutly stunning.
However real life meaning excapes me. You die because you walk into a green light, after waiting through a red light. Is this a timing in love poem? Just a guess.
Loved the poem regardless!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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4 posted 2008-02-14 08:28 PM


oohhhhhh i guess i just didnt read it all thoughly. lol but this poems meaning still leaves me confused... i guess im not intuitive as you.
young_blood
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5 posted 2008-02-15 01:24 AM


yes, earl you hit it on the head. it is quite metaphorical in its message of waiting through rough times in love only to have it die when unleashed at full throttle.
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6 posted 2008-02-15 06:16 PM


hey hey,
  this was one of the most captivating poems i've read on this site, actually...ever! it made me want to understand it and know what was going on in your head while you were writing it. beautiful imagry too. you are incredibly talented loved it<3
  !Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

young_blood
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7 posted 2008-02-17 07:05 PM


thanks for reading

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8 posted 2008-02-24 11:30 PM


wow!  i don't think a poem has ever seemed as close to my life as that one just did...you are an incredible writer, and even though the idea behind this is sad, it is a beautiful poem.

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

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9 posted 2008-02-25 02:57 AM


Wow Alex yooh got me again!!! amazing poem the ending really gave it away made thing so much clearer tue me Great Write!!!
Krysti

young_blood
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10 posted 2008-02-25 06:01 PM


oh thank you both you are giving me a big head
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