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young_blood
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0 posted 2008-02-11 09:54 PM


Long Distance (For One Low Weekly Price)


I've won the part of inappropriate fool,
its driving
you mad. At night
the inconsistant beating of my heart
propells the music at this
casual ball (or play).
The occasion calls
but never recieves an answer,
I'm quite busy. (playing the)
Fool.

© Copyright 2008 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
Earl Robertson
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1 posted 2008-02-11 10:02 PM


Very nice Alex. I got more from this one than usual! Great write!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

young_blood
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2 posted 2008-02-11 10:04 PM


Thank you earl. If you have any suggestions, I'm open ears. You are one of the few people that I think can help with abstract writing on this teen board.
Earl Robertson
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3 posted 2008-02-11 10:12 PM


Me?!? Suggestions?!? Abstract writing??! You must be joking!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

young_blood
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4 posted 2008-02-11 10:23 PM


haha not at all. You have the art of disconnection figured out. Seriously, if you have suggestions, I'd love to hear them.
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5 posted 2008-02-11 10:36 PM


wow this is really good. i love reading your abstract poems. there fun to read =) good work!
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6 posted 2008-02-11 11:16 PM


WOAH!!! another amazazing write!!! Love it.... just.. ugh!! yooh blow me away Alex!!!hehe
Krysti

young_blood
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7 posted 2008-02-12 12:18 PM


thank you both for reading...
crimsonXnails
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8 posted 2008-02-15 07:15 PM


hey hey,
  Wowsers! you are my favouritest! man, i wish i could write that good!(huh)...sigh. i love it. you r amazing!
  !Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

young_blood
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9 posted 2008-02-17 07:02 PM


oh thank you. its always nice to have new readers.
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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10 posted 2008-02-17 10:34 PM


ahahahah so cute, i loved it- been reading your stuff- just not commenting, but you're doing an amazing job (as per usual so what shall ye do next ye sicaphantic fool?(wow i spelt that one right with out any help!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! three cheers for the spelling challenged Kate!!!!!!!!!!!)

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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11 posted 2008-02-17 10:38 PM


haha yes three cheers to kate!!! hahaha!!!!

~Zach~

"Nice guys finish last"

young_blood
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12 posted 2008-02-19 12:10 PM


haha...thanks kate. I'm glad you've been reading.
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