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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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0 posted 2008-02-09 02:36 PM



A Simple Phrase

You think that I’m ignoring you
But, the plain and true fact it,
I can’t bear to see the look
The one that your eyes give

It’s a torture to me
To see you swallowed in pain
It’s a struggle to keep my eyes dry
When they threaten to fall like rain

Your uncanny ability
To read me much too well
Surprises and confuses me
Much more than I can tell

But your words make all better
They give me air to breathe
That simple phrase- I love you
Means so much to me

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2008-02-09 03:09 PM


But your words make all better
They give me air to breathe
That simple phrase- I love you
Means so much to me

oh Kate Darlin'!!!!!!! haha yess i loved this one tue.. except this time i have a reason!!! hehe I can really relate to this I thnik everyone has felt this way.. mm so beautifully written!!!
Krysti

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2 posted 2008-02-09 04:39 PM


I love it. Great job, I really like the last stanza. It puts meaning into the whole poem!

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Earl Robertson
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3 posted 2008-02-09 11:19 PM


I loved it! This poem spoke volumes to me.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

Artic Wind
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4 posted 2008-02-19 05:40 PM


Enjoyed the Read!



ARCTIC WIND

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5 posted 2008-02-19 05:44 PM


Heart-felt, Emotional, beautiful, sweet. yes this is an amazing poem.

~Zach~

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