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You Should Be Mine
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You Should Be Mine |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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I think of how You're probably on the phone with her Right Now And this Anger, this Jealousy Burns deep within my heart My Soul It should be me you're talking to It should me you're falling for It should be me you're walking to my next class' door But it isn't And I hate her I dont even know her But I want her gone And I call her a sk^nk And a hoe In my mind Though I know it's not right And she's probably really kind Oh, but, Baby, You should be mine... |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
wow this is really good! i like the topic that you wrote about. i can sort of relate to this. but im a guy.. so my ex dated my best friend after we broke up. *opps my inner thought just came out ahh! lol* srry about that lol. otherwise great poem! |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
Thx a lot, Rain |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
wow i love your poem it is so real!! |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Good job. I can feel the emotions in this poem. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Do you know what I really like about your poems? The way that right along side all the emotion and intensity in every single one of your poems, there is amazing description. Just the way that you word everything gives the reader a really good idea of whats going on and what every 'character' is feeling. It's amazing! keep it up!!! FoReVeR.BrOkEn |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Cierra.. wow this wuz soo good I loved this one.. this has got to be my fav. poem from you!!! Krysti |
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