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Teen Poetry #8

Torn by Trust

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-02-06 09:57 PM

I once loved you, I wont
make that mistake again.
Because this is what you
have turned me into, this
is how I live. Surrouded by
ice walls, unbreakable
from the outside world.

Trapled and torn lies my
heart on the ground, you
cut it out and threw me down.
Screaming at me that I was
not worth life, chocking me
with you'r own way of living.

Kindness is all I feel, nothing
more than that. I will be
traped here forever, stuck with
the betrayal you left me.
This is how I live, frozen on
the outside. I have nothing
that will save me and nothing
that I can give.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-02-06 10:41 PM

hmm not bad. i like it.

~Zach~

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

2 posted 2008-02-06 10:56 PM

So terribly sad... I'm actualy tearing.
I guess that means its a good poem... hope it didn't realy happen though...

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2008-02-07 05:04 PM

In a way it did. Maybe it's just because of the way I took it thats made it sound so horrible, but one day i'll get over it. Thanx for reading

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

4 posted 2008-02-07 07:00 PM

This is how I live, frozen on
the outside.
I loved this part...great job!

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