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LittleWillow
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0 posted 02-06-2008 03:05 PM       View Profile for LittleWillow   Email LittleWillow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LittleWillow

Hey =] Haven't wrote in, in a while. Lost the internet at home. So here it is the latest to my addition. Not very keen on it, but its okayy i guess. Let me know? =] x-x-x

Tonight im leaving.
I'm packing my bags and going.
I'm fed up of tears and being hurt.
The only thing i can see is you.
The only thing i want is you.
But how can i treat myself this way?
Letting you rule me, and guide me through the day.

I'll never make sense of it all.
I'll never understand why?
Why you left me here to cry.

Don't say anything it really wont help your case.
Why you chose her over me?
Or why you put yourself in this place.
The fact is you done it.
You under-estimated me.
& what i can do.

The pain will heal.
The memories will fade.
I just never imagined us ending this way.
You promised me. You swore on your life.
That you wouldn't stray.
But you did and now im calling it a day.

I'm standing here & looking at my home.
Picturing you in every part.
All the things we did.
& how we've so easily fallen apart.

I can forgive & forget
I can pretend & realise.
I know you think i wont be able to cope.
I know you think i will fall.
Just remember you ended it all.
The tears will dry.
& ill start living my life for me again.

You don't seem to understand. What you've done.
You dont seem to understand
That i can live without you.
I just didnt want to.
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wolf girl
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since 12-03-2007
Posts 150
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1 posted 02-06-2008 05:31 PM       View Profile for wolf girl   Email wolf girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wolf girl

i love the last line.

-jenna
XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland


2 posted 02-06-2008 08:54 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

wow, that was realy good. I could picture everything in my head like it was a part from a movie. Great job. Keep it up!

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

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3 posted 02-06-2008 09:32 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"The pain will heal.
The memories will fade.
I just never imagined us ending this way.
You promised me. You swore on your life.
That you wouldn't stray.
But you did and now im calling it a day" i dont know why but i love this line in your poem. this is really great i love it!
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4 posted 02-07-2008 01:47 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

Wow this iz a really strong poem.. loved the last stanza such great words to end..
Great tue have yooh back
Krysti
LittleWillow
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5 posted 06-11-2009 12:31 PM       View Profile for LittleWillow   Email LittleWillow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LittleWillow

Heeey i have only just got the internet back at home after a year!
Thank you all for the comments!
They fab!

Thank you for your suport!
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