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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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0 posted 2008-02-05 09:55 PM



Shrouded with Shamed Intentions

The day is dawning faster
As I slip into the cover
Of the secret inclinations
That you have recently discovered

A sly look from over shoulder
The view I can not see
You’re waiting for my falsehoods
To rip and fall from me

But my face- so carefully veiled
It would take a thousand swords
To scratch the shallow surface
Of my armor made of words

So why then try to hold my dear
When what you see is all you’ll get
I’m hiding from you love
And I know that you regret

The painful words and glances
The way you would ignore
The simple pleading askance
For you to me adore

But those days of games are over
Because we live in years of now
We can not retrace the steps
There is no one there allowed

So give up, the world would tell you,
On that covered harpy ditz
But you won’t because you discovered
She is your only chance

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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Earl Robertson
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1 posted 2008-02-05 10:55 PM


(a screaming yelling cursing noise is heard only seconds after Earl leaves the room. Several iprovised curse words (dang!, fetch, flippin game!) can be diserned from the otherwise indisphirable string of obviously angry sounds.)

OK I'm back. Kate yet anouther amazing poem! As you can see it provoked a...strong reaction from me. I HATE the games of deciet lies and emtional detachment which your poem obviously describes. It's somthing we all see every day. The deeper meaning I got from it was a subtle love. Far to resemblant of my own current circumstances to not bring those feelings of cunfution, love and frustration!
In short GREAT JOB KATE!!!!!!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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2 posted 2008-02-07 09:09 AM


Thank you. Would you like to hear the story behind the lies and deciet? well i'll tell it hear and you can read if you wish.

i have "loved" a few different people in my years. the first two i hurt pretty badly. not intentionally- i just had to get out for various reason of which are too complex to describe (and i know what you're in all likeliness thinking, that's not true things aren't ever as complicated as people make them out to be, well, this really is) but the last few have all left me scared. but the one i love now, he is wonderful- everything i could ask for he is (or is willing to become) but my pain is a greater pain to him than to me, so that is what i'm veiling, my pain.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Earl Robertson
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3 posted 2008-02-07 06:03 PM


I think I may understand more than you know. (sigh) I am thinking I'm in my first 'love' and basicaly am in the opposite possition. And yes it is as complicated as people make it out to be.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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4 posted 2008-02-07 06:30 PM


Wow this is amazing i love it. i can relate to this quite a bit. But i'd rather not discuss what happen... but over all AMAZING POEM!
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