The Art of Clumsiness Around Gasoline And Cigarettes

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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

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Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2008-02-04 06:30 PM

The Art of Clumsiness Around Gasoline And Cigarettes

The little I know
seems to be whoring itself away
to any open eared woman. It's possible
that I'm a bit nervous of
love
and all of its entrails.
They can sleep in a pile
by the exit sign,
whispering goodnight.
But that's quite off topic,
what I wish to point out are
the lies,
the lies,
the lies,
that I tell. Maybe I can blame it on
Tourette's,
but that's like putting
a prostitute in a party dress, everyone knows
what's underneath.
I suppose I'm out of excuses.
I lie,
I lie,
I lie.

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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-02-04 09:09 PM

nice job. your right everyone lies. but good poem. are you new to PIP? because i havent seen you here before or at least not at teen poetry #8 lol?

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2008-02-04 09:17 PM

No, I'm actually quite old. Old enough that I technically shouldn't be posting in this forum anymore, but I was requested back by a few people. I thank you for reading, I encourage you to read my stuff a few times. There are deeper meaninga than the ones that are obvious. For example, this poem was not mainly about lies or lying. Again, I encourage you to look for the deeper meaning, the insecurities in the words that give away the hidden thoughts. Again, thank you for your time.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-02-05 02:10 AM

ALEX!!!! ohhh I always love seeeing yooh back on the front pages and reading your poems lOved this!!!! great to see you pop in once in awhile

missed yooh here
Krysti

jessie
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since 2007-03-27

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AUSTRALIA.

4 posted 2008-02-05 02:31 AM

this was great its like nothing i have read before.
it was unique and lovely
nicley** done

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

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BC, Canada

5 posted 2008-02-05 05:23 PM

Good write! Acctualy exelent write! I am still trying to figure out what this means (deep, very deep)Loved the poem!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

6 posted 2008-02-05 06:32 PM

Thank you both. I am glad that you are allowing the words to sink in a bit and challenge you

rebel~angel
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since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

7 posted 2008-02-11 01:19 PM

I really love the way you described the ....entrails of love?....it makes the whole thing have just a little bit of a ... grittier feel to it, i think....anyway! i really liked it, i'm still trying to figure out the deeper meanings and all...but it was really good.

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

8 posted 2008-02-11 05:10 PM

I am so happy that you read this. Thank you.

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