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0 posted 2008-02-03 10:22 PM



The weeping willow sheds her tears
on this warm, summer night.
Not know when twilight nears
but well knowing of his plight.
The moon smiles with his pasty face.
while the wind sings her lullaby.
The flowers with petals of lace
dance without a single wry.

I'm sitting by the old oak tree
admiring her song
My body feels light-weight and free
I can see no wrong
I dare not wish to wake from this lovely little dream.
But daylight has his own intentions
To wake me with light, a clever scheme...
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umm sorry but i couldnt figure out a word that would rhyme with intentions and that would fit my poem. sorry i couldnt finish my poem. *wow that sounds like a lame excuse but its true. im stupid like that* Lolz! If you guys think of something let me know thanks!  

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1 posted 2008-02-04 06:29 AM


hey, i always hated it when people would do this to me. but sometimes it helps out a little. i kinda see a pattern. if you dont like it then dont worry i wont be mad or upset, just look.


The weeping willow sheds her tears
on this warm, summer night.
Not knowing when twilight nears
but well knowing of his plight.
The moon smiles with his pasty face.
while the wind sings her lullaby.
The flowers with petals of lace
dance without a single wry.

I'm sitting by
the old oak tree
admiring her song
My body feels
light-weight and free
I can see no wrong
I dare not wish
to wake from this
lovely little dream.
But daylight has
his own intentions
To wake me with light,
a clever, clever, scheme...

all i did is break it into a pattern and add one clever at the end. i thought it was kinda kool. maybe you would too. later

CO

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