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emptead
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0 posted 2008-01-31 11:40 PM


Here’s how it works:
Start with flirting and charm,
Be sweet, it’s brand new.
He sets the mood,
Peekaboo!  
Love tripped you yet again
like a clumsy child talking to a fool;  
must be déjà vu.

The picture is romantic;
Your first French kiss,
Warning: it’s ecstatic.
What an intimate bliss,
Experience a wild thing.
Stress uncovered
As confessions reveal.
You’re just a rebound radiance,  
How does it feel?
We had to cut out random words from magazine and make a poem out of the words we've cut out, here's what I came up with.


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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2008-02-01 08:15 PM


out of the words we've cut out, here's what I came up with.~~

Great poem I loved this... Welcome to Passions
Krysti

Falling rain
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2 posted 2008-02-01 10:52 PM


not bad for puitting words together, but isnt that what poetry is about? just putting words together?? hmmmm a question to think about lol keep up the good work!
RevengeIsMine
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3 posted 2008-02-01 10:56 PM


Hey This is great.. Welcome to PIP really love this poem..
XxForever.BrokenxX
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4 posted 2008-02-02 04:17 PM


I like this, for some reason it makes me want to laugh. hmmm...Oh well whatever, good write. Oh yeah and Falling Rain...You're kind of right. Poetry does involve putting words together, but! the trick is to make it real with emotion. Words mean little with out something to support them.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Earl Robertson
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5 posted 2008-02-02 11:07 PM


Good job! Great write espeicialy with such hard guidlines.
I'm not sure if poetrys as much about putting words together as Finding words to express emotion or philosiphy. Small distinction but still.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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6 posted 2008-02-03 08:26 PM


umm i thought i had posted a reply to this, guess not . . . nicely done. i liked it- it was edgy like the persona was just itching to do something more.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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