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The Gum
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The Gum |
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Ian L.R. Sanchez Junior Member
since 2007-07-05
Posts 16 |
It may be small, But it is very sweet. You can chew and chew, You can’t get enough of it. If you let it stretch, It can go as far as it can. But if you stretch too far, It can be the end. As the gum stretches, It gets farther and farther. And the longer it goes, It gets weaker and weaker. If you let that continue, It can break apart. If that does happen, It can break your heart. You have the power to choose, The power to save. You can prevent the gum from stretching, Prevent them from going away. If you don't know what this poem is really about, I don't mind questions  |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
psh i love this like so much it's rediculously charming. lol. it's nonsensical i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! eeeeeeee! it was great! -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Ian L.R. Sanchez Junior Member
since 2007-07-05
Posts 16 |
Haha, thanks ^^ |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
All right Mr Sanchez you're brilliant poem has me making all kinds of (probably inncorrect) guesses. Here it goes: I think this poem is about friendship, a friendship (or love) that is close to falling apart because one side or the other is being smothered. In the case of love your worried your coming on too fast and loosing the whole thing. However your in your last line you use the plural them, instead of her. Makes me think of the same principle applied to friendship. ie. you don't realy have anthing to do with each other and you keep trying. Am I anywhere near? Exelent job anyway "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
ok I read this poem twice now... the forst time I read it I didn't think I could reply because... well I thought you were actually writing bout gum haha yea... long day.... n e waiz I came back to it 2dai and I thought that this poem iz about love... thats my guess.... so i really kinda do agree with Earl...btw GREAT POEM Krysti |
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Ian L.R. Sanchez Junior Member
since 2007-07-05
Posts 16 |
Well, Its actually about how relationship can go bad and the longer you let that happen the weaker your relationship starts to get, and that you have the power to save that relationship so don't just sit your ass down and wait for it to get better, stand up and save it so yea, you both are still correct and thanks To Earl: I used the plural "them" because it can be a guy or a girl, or even more than one friends ^^ |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
lol...I agree with hunnie it has been a long day cuz I thought it was about gum too! no I am just joking. metaphore is great..good job!! |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
At first i was't going to read it, 'casue im like "ptsh..i don't want to read it, im not in the mood." BUT!!! then! i DID read it and I think it's amazing. I read the first stanza and im like...ok. So i kept reading and soon i was like, "okay, this is NOT about Gum!" so i read it all the way through and i understood. Even before i read the other replies! yeah, thats right! I acually made sense of something!!! well..anyway, Great poem!! FoReVeR.BrOkEn |
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Ian L.R. Sanchez Junior Member
since 2007-07-05
Posts 16 |
Thank you so much! |
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