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*CaT*
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since 2007-12-07
Posts 46
Oxford, England

0 posted 2008-01-26 09:53 AM



Arguments begin with lies and deceit,
Also when girls pretend to be sweet.
Perfect little angles can turn ever so mean,
And the language they use is a disgrace and obscene.
When you're standing fists clenched and they're all shouting "fight!"
You must think to yourself that "this cannot be right,"
You could walk away and let them commandeer,
Or simply get on with it and not interfere.
Whatever happens you'll be friends again soon,
Because good friends stay friends from morning till noon

The ending is really lame... any ideas/improvements welcome



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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
1 posted 2008-01-26 01:05 PM


instead of

Whatever happens you'll be friends again soon,
Because good friends stay friends from morning till noon

how about

Whatever happens you'll be friends again soon,
You'll be whispering and laughing to your own special tune

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

rebel~angel
Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71
Iowa USA
2 posted 2008-01-26 10:08 PM


i do believe you meant "angels"...not "angles"...i could be wrong, however.

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

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