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Teen Poetry #8

To The Tune of Revenge

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

0 posted 2008-01-23 06:31 PM

um, as you can see it is to the tune of revenge cause it is little happy kid songs (aka liar, liar, ring around the rosy, and twinkle twinkle little star) and is about REVENGE!!! MUA-HA-HA-HA!!!!
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To The Tune of Revenge

you’re a liar, you’re a liar
with a heart Blazing on Fire
filled with Horrible Desires
-you’re a liar-

so we’ll ring around the Devil
in a pit of stones and pebbles
singing “Ashes! Ashes!”
as we Burn you to the ground!

flicker, flicker
we watch our game-
how we Wonder at your Shame!
up above our heads you plea-
for the Entire World to see!

-Flicker, Flicker!-
as you cry!-
you’ll get No sympathy if you Lie!

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2008-01-23 08:19 PM

clever...nice i like it.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2008-01-23 10:45 PM

I agree soo clever I loooved this:P very niicee

Krysti

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2008-01-25 07:22 PM

Can't believe u only got two comments on this... Its amazing some ppl don't know talent when they see it..!!

Really loved it anyways.. Well done.. u portrayed my name very well lol..

Luv,
Jess

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

4 posted 2008-01-30 04:45 PM

haha! thanks! oh yes, revenge is MINE!!! =)

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-01-31 05:50 PM

This IS amazing! and clever and pure talent. I would never think of somthing like that to right about. Fantastic!

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Ri
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since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

6 posted 2008-02-02 01:14 PM

Very original, I love this concept of a child like song to convey more mature emotions
=)

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

7 posted 2008-02-18 03:30 PM

thanks! i also had the idea to take famous lines from poems and mesh them together into one but it seemed too hard to do so i tried this.

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