The Lock on Heaven's Gates

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Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

0 posted 2008-01-21 05:17 PM

actaully the title!!! =)
its about a friend ive been helping for about a year. shes obsessed with this guy who dosent like her back. it pretty much turned to obsession, and ive been having to take care of her this entire time. now he wont even talk to her, and shes not only hurt herself, but flipped the entire table over at lunch, screamed and ran away. shes not usually like this. shes acutally pretty normal. I even liked the guy but gave him up for her because i saw she liked him more... and today she yelled at me for simply talking to the guy i loved but gave up on to help her. anyhoo, his name is matt but she called him Gabriel so i wrote this.

sorry for the long explantation and hope you like!
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The Lock on Heaven's Gates

You called the angel "Gabriel"
clutched his memory tight
but your love turned to obsession
sending seraphs into flight

I tried my best to help you
to be your harp in hand
but the more I tried the more you cried
and the glass grew low on sand

I tried my best to save you
for every angel has it's sins
and even you, an angel too
were beautiful, within

but as your heaven fell apart
and sweet Gabe flew away
your sadness turned to fits of rage
...still, for my angel I did pray

all I ever wanted
was to show you that I cared
to sit with you and talk to you
and tell you don't be scared

but an angel is quite different
when preoccupied with pain
feathers replaced by fire
common sense turned to disdain

and thus you pushed myself away
your buttress if you fell
and now, without your conscience, Gabriel,
or a story left to tell,
be on the watch, angelic friend,
it's a short distance to hell

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2008-01-21 05:35 PM

oh wow, it was beautiful dear, it seems this forum is obbsessed with angels . . . just a thought (usually the angels are also rebellious . . . . lol) just some food for thought and an interesting insight.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

rebel~angel
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since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

2 posted 2008-01-21 10:46 PM

well, as an angel myself...i can tell you that that was amazing! lol i really liked the way emotion just kinda...seeped through the words.

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

3 posted 2008-01-22 06:36 AM

wow... thanks everyone!!! im so happy you like it!!! =)

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2008-01-22 06:47 AM

really this was very good and i liked it alot. its very deep and i think the emotion shows through. nice.

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

5 posted 2008-01-22 09:15 AM

thanks! im deciding whether or not to send it to my friend... right now ive decided to remove myself from the situation so she can see all ive done for her. not to sound self-important or anything but its true.

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

6 posted 2008-01-23 12:36 PM

Again Jaki brilliance. We are in total agreement and while I've never put it in these words (mine are alot harder to understand!) I've had those kind of thoughts in my head to!

Anyway love the poem espeicialy this bit:

and now, without your conscience, Gabriel,
or a story left to tell,
be on the watch, angelic friend,
it's a short distance to hell

Reminds me allot of my own musings. (I feel a poem coming on...I hope...kind of) I do believe that what your saying is the truth in many situations. It's amazing how close to darkness we are, even in the brightest light.
Very deep; I'll leave a note if I post the poem that comes from this.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2008-01-23 01:18 AM

Wow I loved this you are a veerry talented writer

Krysti

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

8 posted 2008-01-23 03:19 PM

THANK YOU ALLL!!!!! Im grinning with happiness!!!!

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