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Jaki H
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0 posted 2008-01-20 12:11 PM


yet again, its really untitled...
and it didnt really happen, its more of a general insight on human behavior.
hope you like!
xoxo, Jaki H

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speak, laugh, gossip, talk-
a sunny day, a friendly walk

bicker, argue, disagree-
will you still be friends with me?

anger building, somewhat mad-
one seven year old- sobbing, sad

Scream! Fight! run away-
a friend chasing after, to save the day

Cornered! in the freezing rain-
heart on Fire- searing pain

Cornered! on a Bridge! way up high-
one makes Excuses, Both kids cry

Cornered! CORNERED! What do I do?
I don't Want to be friends with you!

Hit the ground-
      Sickly sound-
an Arguement, over a Merry-Go-Round!


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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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1 posted 2008-01-20 12:13 PM


ha haha so cute! it was adorable. lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Jaki H
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2 posted 2008-01-20 01:05 PM


thank you!
RevengeIsMine
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3 posted 2008-01-20 08:36 PM


hi..
this is great made me laugh.. ur a good adaption in here and you've gained a fan within me..

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4 posted 2008-01-21 01:00 AM


Wow Welcome To Passions I hope you like it here..... I absolutly lloved this poem amazing flow and everything.. great subject
Krysti

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5 posted 2008-01-21 03:41 PM


Wow! this was enlightening. nice work
Jaki H
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6 posted 2008-01-21 03:44 PM


oh wow!!!! thank you everyone!!!! you cant see me but im glowing with happiness right now!!!

infact, its martin luther king day so i have no homework! im gonna go write more!!!

too bad my other poems arent as well recieved--- oh well! cant have good ones all the time!!!=)

thanks again everyone!!!

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7 posted 2008-01-23 12:17 PM


dang this is tight it kinda mad me laugh but in a cute way iono well cool poem
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