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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

0 posted 2008-01-16 09:11 PM

Thorn in my Side

How can you pretend
That you know who I am
Sure you come and listen
But you don’t comprehend

Your words are sharp and biting
You claw under my skin
You don’t want to hear me
Speaking over again and again

I never cut you
Not the way you cut me
I listen and help you
But you don’t see

That anything worth making
Takes two to create
When you’re not holding your end
Our world suffocates

Sister and friend,
OH why don’t you care?
Am I really so awful
It’s not worth being there?

You take down my fences
Saying you really don’t mind
That you’re there and you’re friendly
(You’re the backstabbing kind)

It’s hard to see hope
When your sister’s a thorn
I’m pulling you out
And I won’t be forlorn

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

1 posted 2008-01-16 09:48 PM

the last two stanza's I think are the best ones of the whole thing but it is a great poem and I thoroughly (I hope I spelt that right) enjoyed it

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

2 posted 2008-01-20 11:58 AM

ooh, i like everything! id add one more syllable to the 2nd to last line, but thats just me.

really good!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2008-01-20 08:42 PM

Kate, Kate, Kate.. seriously if u keep blowing my socks of then i'm gunna need to go shopping.. maybe i should just learn to not wear any socks when i read ur work lol...

No seriously u like blowing me away.. i read all your work sometimes i comment sometimes i don't but no matter what you always seem to create a wonderful piece that touches and inspires me..

Great Work,
Jess

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2008-01-21 01:06 AM

ohhh Kate Darlin' AMAZING everytime i read your work i think back to when you started you had such guud poetry then but now you are really really good. I love reading your poems hunn
Krysti

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

5 posted 2008-01-21 08:36 AM

Awwww thanks!!!!!!!!!!! And hey Jess, I'll go shopping with you- socks are on me! lol. And Krysti oh it's always so nice to hear your kind words. They really really helped today.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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