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Sweetpoet16m4u04
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0 posted 2008-01-14 03:18 PM



Wishes

I wish I could be the one
You think of day and night
I wish I could be the one
You wish you could hold tight

I wish I could be the one
You want in every way
I wish I could be that one
You love more and more each day

I wish I could be the one
To look into those sparkling eyes
I wish I could be the one
That gets your every surprise

I wish I could show you
That you mean everything to me
And I wish you could be the one
To love me for me.

I wish I could be the one,
to have the strength to tell.
I wish I could be the one,
to have you wishing for me as well.

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wolf girl
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1 posted 2008-01-14 08:18 PM


this was really good and i liked it.

-jenna

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2 posted 2008-01-15 03:10 PM


oh.. hunn.... this wuz soo beautiful I really really loved it.........
Krysti

surf_painter
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3 posted 2008-01-16 09:40 PM


I liked it but I think you repeated the line "I wish you could" much too much sorry  
Jaki H
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4 posted 2008-01-19 05:59 PM


i love it! especially the last stanza!
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