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fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

0 posted 2007-12-17 06:47 PM

Why did I love you like I did?
Why did I fill myself with empty illusions?
I tried so many times to push away your love
To tell myself it was just for fun
Where did I go wrong where did it all go?
I can kiss a million times the words I Love You
But those words to you are scattered in the wind
I look at your face and wish…just wish
Even if I close my eyes a thousand times
I can still feel you
Through my weeping I can still hear you
How did I suffocate if I was breathing your air?
How did my dreams turn into nightmares?
I fell down the hole of wonderland but there was no white rabbit to guide me
I slept from the poison but there was no prince charming to wake me with a kiss
I have no courage
I can’t find a way
Can’t even write you a darling poem
All I know now is breath, eat, and sleep
Weep and weep….

not so good at writing about love...

[This message has been edited by fromme2U (12-18-2007 05:00 PM).]

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

1 posted 2007-12-17 11:56 PM

i loved it!! i can totally relate. :] awsome write

sexykitten15
Junior Member

since 2007-07-22

Posts 34

2 posted 2007-12-18 04:32 PM

I really enjoyed this.
I especially loved it when you through in the fairytales.

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

3 posted 2008-01-04 03:35 PM

Thanks girls

stil_watrs_run_deep
Junior Member

since 2008-01-05

Posts 14
missouri

4 posted 2008-01-09 10:55 PM

ya. i loved the imagery when you explained how you felt lost through the fairytales that is so common to everyone. Even if someone had never felt like that, they could relate.

Amazing!! <3

smiles are universal :]

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2008-01-10 09:18 AM

I liked most of it, however the last two lines for me didn't fit as well as I thought they would. And also I loved the two lines referenceing the fairytales but I thought that they were a bit long and each one could have been broken into two seperate lines. (I hope all that made sense) Good job though

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

6 posted 2008-01-17 08:39 AM

I really like it

something thats stupid but works isn't stupid

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