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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-12-04 10:47 PM


the meet was away
and i was okay
as i stepped onto the board

as i went up and started my snap
i knew something was wrong and tryed to hold back
i started to turn a little too slow
then i hit the water and fell down below

my lip was deranged, and drowned just about
i was trying to breath, as blood poured out

i went to the official
and asked to dive
then when he said no
i said "then let me die"

so i went to the hospital
with coach at my side
i didnt say it out loud
but i knew deep inside

so i said

coach im sorry
i let you down
you should be with the team
but your not to be found

he said

shut up bryan
dont appolagize
youve worked your a@# off
just so you could dive

you will dive Bremen
and youll do just fine
because meets are just practices
for whats further down the line

© Copyright 2007 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
rebelangelv
Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538
usa
1 posted 2007-12-04 11:00 PM


tighhhhhhhhhhhht dude :]

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
2 posted 2007-12-05 05:33 AM


it was very nice to see you work with something different, i quite liked it. thanks for sharing.

-Kate


"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
3 posted 2007-12-05 06:03 AM


This is great... Really enjoyed this...
surf_painter
Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
4 posted 2007-12-05 03:47 PM


this was interesting
WaterFairy103
Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196

5 posted 2007-12-09 07:38 PM


This is AMAZING.  Your coach is right. = ] Another masterpiece, babe.

Everyone wants to ride with you in the limo. What you want is someone who'll take the bus with you when the limo breaks down.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2007-12-15 10:16 PM


Very Much Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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