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Teen Poetry #8

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wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

0 posted 2007-12-03 07:35 PM

before you read this keep in mind this is my first poem.

its eaither me or her

which do you choose?

the one youve been with before or something new?

you dont want to hurt me but i know you will

its eaither me or her and you have hurt me before

one more time is fine

i dont feel it cause this has happened before

pain is something that comes and goes with each passing day

pain just wont go away today

it will be gone when i sleep as long as i dont dream

and when i wake up you will be there again

i will see you with her and how happy you are and i will just frown

and think how did things get so turned around?

sexykitten15
Junior Member

since 2007-07-22

Posts 34

1 posted 2007-12-03 07:46 PM

i loved this it was amazing!!

I can relate soo well to this.

I hope everything works out for you

amazing first right

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

2 posted 2007-12-03 08:28 PM

I liked your poem, and considering it was your first, you did a good job. Your rythym seemed a little off, but I might have been reading it too fast. I think you have much potential (don't we all?)

Hope to see more.
And welcome to Passions.

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-12-04 01:29 AM

liked this a lot And Welcome to Passions hope you like it here

Krysti

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