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LOSTinTHISworld
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0 posted 2007-11-27 05:55 PM


has it really happened like this
the way life has played out
i got so much on my mind
that im confused about

and ive been wondering
is love really a feeling
or just something we dream of
so we start pretending

from a girl to a woemn
from a boy to a man
so much is expected
and we do what we can
but in the end
dont we all fail
and maybe thats why i dont try
i only pretend to care

so lets forget about all the hate and pain
just for a moment
you can try but you cant
the dead mans the one come closest
but that man holds secrets
things he should have told
but he was scared and he waited
and now they're burried forever

and at some point
we all feel regret
and no matter how hard we try
we will never forget
and it seems
when we try to remember
our memories fail to please

but as soon as you speak
they want you as a patient
doing anything to twist your words
so they can call you crazy
and theres no hope
for those who dare to think different
you've lost your social status
you're just seen as a mental illness

but where did things turn
i though society was my enemy
but it seems like my own mind's
the one playing tricks on me
and im left to question
the reality od existence
the mentality of the world
feels like its run off micro chips

but screw technology
i'd rather be a dream
and then i'd only have to question
the mentality of whoever dreamed of me

theres too much coinsidence
in a world looking for meaning
those who are paranoid try to believe in fate
but inside i hear them screaming
but maybe paranoia is really jsut a sixth sense
and while everyones looking back at them
they're really one step ahead

and who do you trust
in a world thats so decieving
no matter what is said
there's always a hidden meaning
and how do we stay safe
in a world full of anger
never knowing whats behind
the blank stare of a stranger

has it really happened like this?

{in a million years i wont be over you}

© Copyright 2007 becky dudley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-11-28 12:57 PM


wow I liked this It was really good I can really relate to it too amazing
Krysti

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that So Cal
2 posted 2007-11-28 01:21 AM


"but screw technology
i'd rather be a dream
and then i'd only have to question
the mentality of whoever dreamed of me"

Wow...You took the words right out of my mouth. Truly a thought-invoking piece! Lots of questions that beg to be answered. Maybe a little too much to handle at first.

I repeat: Wow.

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
3 posted 2007-11-28 01:21 AM


"but screw technology
i'd rather be a dream
and then i'd only have to question
the mentality of whoever dreamed of me"

Wow...You took the words right out of my mouth. Truly a thought-invoking piece! Lots of questions that beg to be answered. Maybe a little too much to handle at first.

I repeat: Wow.

Artic Wind
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4 posted 2007-12-10 08:19 PM


Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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5 posted 2007-12-10 08:58 PM


alright, this peices was truly a masterpiece beyond compare.

these were my favorite lines- you had so many!

"and at some point
we all feel regret
and no matter how hard we try"

"i'd rather be a dream
and then i'd only have to question
the mentality of whoever dreamed of me"

"but maybe paranoia is really jsut a sixth sense
and while everyones looking back at them
they're really one step ahead"

beautiful work. i'm putting this in my library and keeping it forever. i truely loved it and hope to get a signed poem one day from your hand.

-Kate


"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

LOSTinTHISworld
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since 2003-06-01
Posts 94
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6 posted 2007-12-11 03:02 PM


wow, thanx for all your comments. i wasn't sure what poeple would think of it, but im glad you enjoyed it.
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