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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-11-25 04:36 AM



If only I would have loved you
i'd still be in your arms
If only you weren't so obsessive
i'd still be laughing at your charms

I know I should feel bad
for pushing you aside
all those times I said i love you
But really I just lied

If only I din't find it funny
that you loved me with all your heart
If only it didn't bug you
when for one day we were apart

I know that you hate me now
more than I thought you could
But I still can't stop laughing
I never thought I would

If only you weren't obsessive
I wouldn't have left you so sad
If only I'd have loved you
you wouldn't be so mad

© Copyright 2007 Krysti - All Rights Reserved
rebelangelv
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1 posted 2007-11-25 03:31 PM


dannnnnnnnnnnnnng krysti ...awwww i loved this...i can understand that feeling...it was great

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
2 posted 2007-11-25 11:57 PM


Wow...Great poem. I don't know what else to say. Lol. I should probably show this to one of my friends as a warning to being too obsessive.

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

Leanne <3
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since 2007-08-25
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3 posted 2007-11-26 07:07 PM


I love how honest you were in this, I really enjoyed reading it  
fromme2U
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4 posted 2007-12-07 12:36 PM


Nice!! then again your stuff is always good
*CaT*
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5 posted 2007-12-07 01:09 PM


I loved the way you were so honest. Love your style of writing
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2007-12-12 09:31 PM


Enjoyed ALOT!



ARCTIC WIND

Elias Nevermore
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7 posted 2007-12-13 01:32 AM


great poem

"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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8 posted 2007-12-13 07:40 AM


oh my gosh, bam! i can totally relate to this! *giggle* loved these lines,

all those times I said i love you
But really I just lied

and i've totally been doing this, it makes me feel almost bad . . ..  in a giddy way . . . . you evoke stange feelings with this incredible masterart work you've created here Krysti. Love it!!!!!!!!!!!! in my library.

-Kate


"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

pencil&paper
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asleep somewhere in my head
9 posted 2007-12-17 02:16 AM


i really liked this one i think alot of people can relate to it
i totally can esp. the part about saying that you love the person but only lying, i really liked that part and the last stanza


"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

Derek
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since 2007-10-20
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New Hampshire, USA
10 posted 2007-12-17 01:25 PM


great poem
Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30
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Curiousity, and wonder
11 posted 2007-12-18 02:47 PM


Hunnie no wonder how can you love obsession? And more than that obsession can only love what it obsess

Enjoy your thoughts of confusion

Hugs Beckie

sexykitten15
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since 2007-07-22
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12 posted 2007-12-18 04:27 PM


I loved it.
but like it gives me a weird odd like sad but funny feeling.
like its funny that ur laughing at the fact.
but then its sad that ur laughing. lol

but either way its truly amazing.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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13 posted 2008-01-05 06:31 PM


ah ha! see sexy kitten is just as feeling confused as I!!!!!! i'm not the only one, ah ha ha ha ha ha. lol. i'm in one of those moods again . . .. . . . lol

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
14 posted 2008-01-06 02:18 AM


I saw the title and said to myself, "I could've sworn I've read this one." And I was right! When I read the poem again, and the comments after my own, I had to laugh! Kitten and Red were the funniest!

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love &lt;3
15 posted 2008-01-06 10:11 AM


thank you thank you- i'm only here to add a light spirit. lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

xbrokenxlullabyx
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since 2007-12-25
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NJ, U.S.A.
16 posted 2008-01-06 04:37 PM


This is so great, its really honest
but what's the msot refreshing is the switched up tone of the character... it's different than your average breaking up poem

Susanna V.

Earl Robertson
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17 posted 2008-01-23 11:21 PM


(low whistle) Love it hunnie! Makes you wonder how close the line between obsession and love truly is... hmmmm.

ps. lol

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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