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maddorani
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0 posted 2007-11-20 09:02 PM



im starting to love you more
but really i am dieng inside
cuz sometimes i feel like you are happy with me
sometimes it seems like ur sad with me
or sometimes it feels like yuo hate me
but sometimes you gave me hatred
you gave me pain
ms like you became a burden for me
or i became a soul
a soul thats white and that cant be seen
if you hate me so much and gave me pain
then y am i starting to love u more
it just doesnt make sense
when i see your face
t feel like piercing you
when i hear your voice
i feel like covering my ears
when i feel you touching me accidently
i try to move away but i cant
cuz i cant tolerate this pain of loving no matter how much you hate me
im starting to love you more
whn i see your eyes
i feel like closing my own eyes
and never see in them
every single day
i am infatuated for you
i am addicted for you
this lust is taking over me
i want to be yours
but im not sure ieally hate me
but im starting to love you more each day
you stay in my thoughs and never leaver
i sometimes think about the bad things you did to me
but whne i was in desperate of a freind
i came up to u and u sort of helped me
but i felt the love that i have for you
but we only talked once and you started hating me
and from that day on
you started torturing my heart and you let the pain stay in my heart
but i still you and starting to love you more and more each day
PLZ TELL ME IF ANYONE LIKES THIS POEM OK THANK YOU

© Copyright 2007 madiha - All Rights Reserved
justanotherstorm
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1 posted 2007-11-20 09:06 PM


wow this is sad but a great poem

maddorani
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2 posted 2007-11-20 09:06 PM


thanks but it was deep rite
maddorani
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3 posted 2007-11-20 09:14 PM


so will u give me ur msn plz plz plz i want ot know u more and talk to u about differnt kinds of things lol
rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
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4 posted 2007-11-20 09:22 PM


god u guys r everywhere. dude either give her ur address or tell her to back off already. n e ways whoeveas poem this is its tight.

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

maddorani
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5 posted 2007-11-20 09:27 PM


yea i knw we r everywhwere i made the poem by the wayh and thanks
rebelangelv
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6 posted 2007-11-20 09:41 PM


well get on one place u guys arent even suppoed to be talking back in forth about random things in the poetry forum
and ur welcome i really enjoyed it

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

maddorani
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7 posted 2007-11-20 09:54 PM


ooops sorry well u see i just registered on here like on the 18th so i really dont know that much well thank u anywasy but i knwo tis sad and do u think its a little deep r u agilr
justanotherstorm
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8 posted 2007-11-21 11:53 AM


yeah its deep
maddorani
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9 posted 2007-11-21 11:55 AM


thanks anyways were not supposed to be chatitng in the poetry forum so give me ur msn ok bye
BrittanyJ
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10 posted 2007-11-21 07:11 PM


"when i hear your voice
i feel like covering my ears
when i feel you touching me accidently
i try to move away but i cant"

This is really sad. Unrequetted love...it's always a horrible experience to go through. Anyways, nice write

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

maddorani
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11 posted 2007-11-21 07:22 PM


thanks was taht ur favorite part of the poem wel i appreciated it
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12 posted 2007-11-22 06:10 PM


yea it was a good poem. Also Leah is sort of right, there is not a rule against talking back and forth but it really takes the whole meaning out of the poem I thinl when there are so many replies that aren't at all related. And yes, you are knew and it will take some time to learn the ropes but if you ever have any questions feel free to email me. and good luck with everything
Krysti

maddorani
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13 posted 2007-11-22 09:49 PM


well thank i really appreciate it u rite good too i hope everythings good wiht u too cuz i read ur poems there really sad
Assassin_of_Verse
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14 posted 2007-11-24 01:46 AM


This is a very heartfelt poem. Have you considered confronting this person? Sorry if this sounds nosy, but I need advice because of my own relationship problems. Also, don't worry about asking if your poetry is good or not. The people here will be happy to do that without asking.

P.S I'm also pretty new here. Yay for newbies!

As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

Artic Wind
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15 posted 2007-12-10 03:53 PM


Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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