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my fragile heart a poem by me
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my fragile heart a poem by me |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
HEY IM NEW HERE and i have a poem to share with u guys so plz tell me if u like this poem and tell me if its deep thanks MY FRAGILE HEART my fragile heart which is so curios which is in excrutiating pain so fragile that its going to break so fragile that i could feel all the loneliness around me so desperate that i need of u dont make me suffer the pain i feel so lonely and desperate and i could feel the way my fragiel hear is crying its not crying tears but crying blodd all i could see is blak no colors i dont know wut happend to my fragile heart it was happy loving caring but someone made made my fragile heart this way i am so desperate so lonely nothing is full of life it seems like everythings dead it seems like theres no life where ever i go i heare those sad songs seeing ppl sad but my fragile heart is crying deep inside and other ppl arnt noticing me my fragile heart that became weak but still has faith my fragile heart that still loves u my fragile heart that becaem urs but i dont know wut to do but when i see u my fragiel heart starts to beat rapidly and quickly and it feels like that u pierced a thorn in my fragile heart because u only like me as a freind just imaging wut im going through can u even feel the pain that im in do u evne knwo tht my fragile desperate heart needs u me just shivering and cant control my self my fragile heart and i becoming so pale like the peach it seems like i amd dieng becasue fo u i am trying to warm my self but it doesnt seem like its working just come back and and make my fraagile heart happy againg bring colors into my life again let me feel teh joy let me feel the happiness my fragile heart wants to be urs only urs so let it be urs i gave my fragile heart to u so u give me urs i loveu so much and so does my fragile heart but soemtimes it seems like my fragile heart ahs a hole cuz of the way i feel and my fragile heart does not feel energetic it feels low my fragile heart is shrinking th love that i have for other ppl cuz my fragile heart is starting to give hatred and being negative about everything and being desperate for the love tht my fragile heart needs sometimes i think about how i would do without u cuz u supported me in everyway since im ur freind u should be concerend about me but i always always try to meak it obvious that i love u but i wonder y u never notcied me sometimes when i would be tlaking about u it seems like my fragile heart starts to pump more blood or sometimes i feel like oozing my blood out i never felt thsi sad before nor did my heart now i am so bored to death and my fragile heart is waiting for u to love me bak and wiating ofr the bright days to come bak my fragile heart which is so curisous which is in excrutiang pain so fragile that its going to break and so fragile that i could feel all the loneliness aorund me so desperate that i need of u my fragile fragile heart which broke BY ME oh yea and tell me if this poem was deep |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
hey kid well youre new so imma call u that k hmm this poem is good but you should tone down on your title you say it too much well thats what i think cuz how i do my poems i express how i feel and what i mean but if this is how you do than thats cool but yeah this is a good poem and its deep |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
well thank u well u could call me maddorani i dont mind and im a 10th grader im in high school |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Haha I beat you both I am an oldie:P ok Maddorani, Welcome to Passions I hope you enjoy it here. As for your poem I liked it a lot the only thing I would change is the structure, some of lines were to long which made it harder to read. I liked the content though I've been here so many times before. And yes it was deep  Krysti |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
well thank i really appreciated but i have been coming on this site alot of times when i get bored i d i read poems on here but i just registered yesterdaybecause i thought atleast someone would read it since im on a thanksgiving break and miss all of my freinds and also i like this one freind of mine and he is in my spanish class and i d i help him alot and he sits behind me and sometimes my heart would beat fast but later on it would go away but when i see him randomly i like him and sometimes i feel lonely without him so i dont know wut to do and also i finished my 1st notebook and riting in my second one i basically rite about love i liked other ppl but they never liked me bak and i am a 1oth grader live in houston texas |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
ooo never mind you aint no kid im younger than you sorry im in 9th grade so yeah but i liked the poem but i agree wit that ohter person some lines are too long but i like your poem |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
lol thanks but im 16 my birthday is in aug 26th lol and i was born in 1991 |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
thank you |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
oh cool your only 2 yrs older than me hmm... |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
wow so ur 14 lol dain and ur in 9th grade when i was in 9th grade i was 15 and by the way i live in houston texas lol |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yeah im 14 well you were only a year older than me texas i remember texas my best friends were over there than i moved but life goes on and i made new friends i lived in Lubbock Texas b4 but now i live in California |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
oh well that suks but im sort of new here i registered on the 18th czu i was bored and also im on a thanksgiving break lol so i miss my freinds and sort of feel lonely so i thought i would make one but im not that new now cuz i used to come on this website alot and read poems but i never knew that they had a forumz section and it feels good when other ppl read ur poems im enjoying it here so did u like my poems so far like my fragile heart sleep and your the love of my life did u think they weree deep |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
lucky u have thanksgiving break i still have school but w/e yeah i think your poems are deep and bring out your inner emotions and idea but maybe thats how u r in reall life idk but i like your poems theyre deep and i can relate to them |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
well thank u but thats how i really feel but my freinds they say u should publish these poems and also they were like these are good but first i never knwe wut to be when i grow up but htne when i was in 9th grade i told my teacher about the notebook but she didnt see the hole thing cuz i didnt finish my notebook at that time but anyways when she was readiing it she was like ur a poet and i was like i never knew that i was a poet i never knew i riet good poetry but as my graduation gift she said she will publish 10 books of mine and put it in amazon.com and also i have to choose like 75 poems to put in ther like my best ones so now im riting in my second notebook now i knw wut i want to be |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
you wanna be a poet or somethin like that i thought about it still am but i dont think im good enough so yeah |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
yea i guess but first i thought of being a teacher then i was like nah lawyer nah doctor i hate blood just didnt know wut to be it took me like 8 yrs to find my career like for example since 1st grade i was looking for my talent or career and i found my talent |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
lol thats cool i wanna be a marine and other things so what do u wanna be |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
i mite stick with being a poet and publish books and be famous and show to other ppl that i could be a poet cuz my cousins odnt like my peoms that much i never shared these kidn but the old ons i have the ons that wernt about love |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
cool u should put dem on here who r your cousins they seem mean |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
it may seem a little wierd when i was in 8th grade i had this crush on a cousin but in my religion we could marry cousins but then after liking him it thought to me that marrying a cousin is nasty lol |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thats funny but weird i wouldnt marry my cousins theyre kinda ugly and too old for me so yeah |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
lol oh yea and read my other poems seasons and a storm u mite like that one too i made one today but i couldsort of feel that its deep im going to rite it later and obviously i would like u to read it and im gonna post i cant belive on here to latr too lazy and so bored plz read my season and a storm by me ok |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yeah ill read it no prob |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
lol ok here is mine hotmail madii13@hotmail.com man im bored llilke hell today this week is going so slow man if u have aim then give it to me or plz make one |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
cool so i guess your name is maddi |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
actually i have alot of nicknames but mine real name is madiha my mom calls me maddorani or madii lol but can u give me ur hotmail since i gave u mine atleast it will be ncie for us to chat with each otther lol if ur on msn u could add me and i will come online |
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