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prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

0 posted 2007-11-10 08:30 PM

I'm falling faster and harder, as i begin to slip
You slowly take me into you grip
As you hold me tight and say i love you sis
I think to myself i wish the word sis didnt exsist
I dont know how to tell you how i feel
but i dont know if i can continue to keep this act real
the act of me not careing for you the way i do
and im only wanting you to be happy that's true
but still i wish you knew, I love you
knowing that you hold me tight and make the outer world dispear
gives me chills makes me fear
I dont want to keep hiding this feeling i feel
But i dont know how to tell you while you are with her,
the one i call my best friend and sister
My friend means the world to be but no matter what i do
it seems i am more quickly tripped and falling harder for you
you cant help the way you feel; and i dont know what to do
should i continue to cower and keep you by my side
or tell you and lose you all together, slowly quietly dying inside
you mean the world to me yet you have not a clue
I now know what i must do
Continue the way that it is now, only wishing you knew
for every lasting moment i spend with you, even if it's as a sis means more to me then losing you.
so forever this is what i shall do.. pledge my hidden love to you. only wishing that you knew..
I secretly do really love you!

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

justanotherstorm
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since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

1 posted 2007-11-10 08:37 PM

ok first i thought u were talkin about your brother cuz it said sis but yeah its just the guy u like
i think people should show their true feelings for each other whether its your brother sister friend father or mother
so yeah great poem it shows your pain just release it

prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

2 posted 2007-11-10 08:43 PM

thanks...just another storm && sorry for the confusion any suggestions?

justanotherstorm
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since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

3 posted 2007-11-10 09:00 PM

oh its cool
but i think its cool the way it is
im kind of in writers block right now so i wouldnt know how to fix it but i think its tight the way it is

prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

4 posted 2007-11-10 09:04 PM

k thanks. for the help....!

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
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5 posted 2007-11-11 03:07 PM

nice first post

Welcome to Passions. I thought your poem really showed strong emotion and that is always good to have in a poem

Krysti

prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

6 posted 2007-11-11 09:32 PM

Thanks Krysti...i just wrote was i was feeling :[

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

7 posted 2007-11-12 07:25 PM

hey it's a good first poem but i too had the confussion all through the poem thinking it was your brother you were talking about until i read one of the poems so maybe if you changed the wording of sis around a bit to maybe sisterly feelings or something just to stop the confussion

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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8 posted 2007-11-12 10:21 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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