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Elias Nevermore
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since 2007-11-03
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0 posted 2007-11-08 07:43 PM



Secrets unfold
I turn my head
to see the truth
as it was written.

Stories untold
World forgotten,
remember life when
it was undiminoshed.

Lies run cold
Humanity suffers
injustice as repen-
tance for its sins.

Sanity grows old
Can you not see
your mind leaving you
to fend for yourself

Men are bold
They stand to fight
at arms as brothers
who rush to their deaths.

Life I hold
So seemlessly flut-
tering away are the
lives falling before me

In the end I realize that this world is not a place for men.
Its didnt accept us by choice, only chance.
it cries out for us all to end the violence,
But its voice goes inheard in the daunting silence.

© Copyright 2007 Author Andrew E.L. - All Rights Reserved
Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal
1 posted 2007-11-08 08:24 PM


Nice poem Andrew, very thought-invoking. I understood your first stanza:

Secrets unfold
I turn my head
to see the truth
as it was written.

It's like your seeing the world as it was meant to be, peaceful, green, and whole.

As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
2 posted 2007-11-08 09:05 PM


oooooooooo, wow. that was incredible, i am in awe. these lines blew me away . . . "In the end I realize that this world is not a place for men."

Wow, i am immpressed (which is not easily done) very nice Andrew.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2007-11-12 10:11 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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4 posted 2007-11-14 01:11 AM


wow amazing write
Krysti

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