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Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
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that So Cal

0 posted 2007-11-08 02:33 AM



I'm so sorry. I'm being extremely selfish right now.

I look outside,
and stare at the rain,
only to see,
a mirror of pain.

I draw inside,
and crash into bed,
only to hear,
your words in my head.

I walk away,
to try and repent,
only to smell,
your lingering scent.

I run back,
to face my fears,
only to taste,
the salt of my tears.

I turn away,
just as I planned,
longing to feel,
your welcoming hand.


I think I'm going to cry. That's the second time since the last time I cried, about a year ago.

© Copyright 2007 Andrew - All Rights Reserved
moondogz
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since 2007-05-01
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Great White North
1 posted 2007-11-08 06:14 AM


Very sad, I hate to see a brother in pain Assassin_of_Verse, but it's better to be in pain than to be in denial. Thanks for sharing and I wouldn't be to concerned about being selfish...when you are in need of sharing, then this is the place for it.
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3
2 posted 2007-11-08 04:33 PM


I think we all feel this way every once in a while, i liked the lines about their words running through your head . . .how many times that's happened to me.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
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3 posted 2007-11-08 11:03 PM


awww that was great and i didnt think u were selfish..  hope u feel better

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2007-11-09 02:56 PM


wow this was amzing the flow was so flawless and i loved the content I can relate so well to it. very nice poem and I hope you feel better
Krysti

surf_painter
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5 posted 2007-11-09 03:37 PM


another amazing and flawlessly designed poem it was amazing and full of emotion these are great works of art
Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
6 posted 2007-11-10 02:17 AM


The people here are so friendly and supportive. Thank you all for your support! *Sniff* I think I'm going to cry again...

As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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In Love <3
7 posted 2007-11-10 07:11 AM


that's why i could never stop posting here, everyone's too nice.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07
Posts 104

8 posted 2007-11-10 08:37 PM


I love it it flows so beautifully.Everyone has to be selfish once and a while its the ony way to keep sanity, We are all here to help...hope the pain fades soon.

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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Come find me?
9 posted 2007-11-12 08:33 PM


This was amazing. I especially loved the first line, but i can't say that it was my favorite part...cause the whole thing was. lol, anyways, i loved this!

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2007-11-12 10:23 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

fromme2U
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Posts 257

11 posted 2007-11-13 05:38 PM


this is sad but very well written.
charlie18
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since 2007-11-14
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Washington, United States
12 posted 2007-11-14 12:33 PM


this was a amazing poem.
i could feel the emotion that was running through you as you wrote this.
i enjoyed reading this.

KandyGrl511
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since 2008-11-30
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Michigan
13 posted 2008-12-02 07:28 PM


oh sooo very sad but i loved it so much!?!
BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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Come find me?
14 posted 2008-12-23 01:45 PM


Wow, very emotional...and touching. I hope you're feeling better by now...

Do you really love me? Or should i just let go now??

KandyGrl511
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since 2008-11-30
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Michigan
15 posted 2008-12-23 07:55 PM


that is good~!?!~NICE WRITING~!?!~
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