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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
this might be good in Dark Poetry as well but n e ways tell me what you think of it ok.  btw its written in the guys P.O.V. I turned the corner and there she was Standing against a shadowed wall Instinctly I leaned and planted a kiss That meant so much yet so innocent and small I came out of the bathroom and there she was Waiting in the darkness of night Pulled me into a hug and kiss, she did And loved me with all her might On my left side, she always sat In the pitch shadows of the theatre Laugh with me, cry with me, and hold me in my fright Was what she did every time that I could just be with her On the bed, on the floor, Hold me that she did But only in the shadows you know For that was how we lived. Yes, shadows are our favorite thing For that is who we are and who we’ll always be But let me tell you the story Of what all else she did to me In the darkness of the bed She was the first to touch Something I’ve concealed from all others And protected very much In the shadows of my room “I love you “ I did say She only shunned my feelings She’s not the same girl I loved that day In the midst of the cold of august Slowly all evil hit her veins Because she joined a shadowed club Happiness was no longer there, for darkness had all reign In the shadows of early morning dew My life came suddenly crashing down She was the one I needed But she was no where to be found One week later I found out That those three months of happiness and bliss Were only months she wanted to use me How could I not of known? All the signs I must have missed In the darkness I did scream All by myself I was in fright Fifty-three pills was what I took And all I did was cry The last time that she saw me She noted the scars upon my arm The cuts were deep the blood was red She knew it was cuz of all that she had done In the darkness my heart was burned And in the shadows ill forever lie Cause after what she did to me I’m no longer alive, I’ve died. novemeber 2007 |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
it was good, until he cut, and od-ed himself, and then of course died. that always makes me sad. i don't have too strong a gut for people would hurt themselves, but that's just me. it was incredible, i'm just sad it ended so sadly. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
thanx. thats good that u cant stomach n e self injury of n e kind; it just shows that u mostly likely wont do it yourself. |
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Elias Nevermore Member
since 2007-11-03
Posts 152 |
rebel, good poem. I like your rhymes scheme. the concept was a little dark but overall good |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
thanx. u dont think the rhyming was forced do u? |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
I like this ALOT && the rymes dnt seem forced 2 me Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks! |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" [This message has been edited by rebelangelv (11-13-2007 06:23 PM).] |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
prettypinkrebel: thanx!!! that means alot. im glad that u liked it. and thanx again cuz i wasnt sure if the whole rhyming thing ws forced cuz it didnt come as easily as others had. but n e ways thanx again! thank u artic wind If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" |
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