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justanotherstorm
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0 posted 2007-10-27 01:53 AM


looking towards the shadows
waiting for someone to pull me out
i here someone scream and they start to shout
but they just scream cuz they got pulled in
just another soul burning in their own sin
this dark abyss leaves u in a bliss
i know bliss means heaven or even paradise
but thats what an abyss is sometimes
we got to move on in our own lives
why are we waiting for someone to pull us out
we can do it ourselves
just pray to God maybe we wont go to hell


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rebelangelv
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1 posted 2007-10-27 12:35 PM


wow thats deep kinda sad....but good liked the use of unusal words rather that just repeition.
justanotherstorm
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2 posted 2007-10-27 05:44 PM


i usually dont like repeating myself it get tiresome after a while
rebelangelv
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3 posted 2007-10-27 07:06 PM


mmm yea i suppose it does..i h8 it cuz im like partly deaf or sumthin and i always make my friends repeat themselves like a million times. i think im kinda repetative in my work but thats okay w/ me .
justanotherstorm
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4 posted 2007-10-28 12:32 PM


wow r u like old or something or were u born like that not to sound rude
rebelangelv
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5 posted 2007-10-28 12:45 PM


i cant even drive yet memeber!!!! dude!
n e ways i think it was cuz i was always put in car w/ blasting music and my uncle always locked me in his room to blast some horrible song in my ears. ive had my ears hurt a lot of times too so maybe thats it

justanotherstorm
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6 posted 2007-10-28 12:46 PM


oh yeah well im sorry for your hearing
rebelangelv
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7 posted 2007-10-28 12:55 PM


hahahha its cool its not that bad. just a little
justanotherstorm
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8 posted 2007-10-28 12:56 PM


thats good i guess
rebelangelv
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9 posted 2007-10-28 01:08 AM


yea
justanotherstorm
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10 posted 2007-10-28 01:11 AM


im tired
rebelangelv
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11 posted 2007-10-28 01:12 AM


ok.....ima go to bed soon too. i dont feel so well. i was expecting a call tho. o well. ill get it 2moro morning
justanotherstorm
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12 posted 2007-10-28 01:14 AM


hmm k ill talk to u later then
rebelangelv
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13 posted 2007-10-28 10:34 AM


u know these forums arent like myspace pages where u can just talk back and forth....thats wut the email link is for. so yea
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