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rebelangelv
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0 posted 2007-10-26 11:29 PM



Dear One Who Broke My Heart

Hello dear one,
We haven’t talked in a while
I felt like writing cause I miss you
Like a blanket to a child

I hope that everything’s okay
Are you enjoying your new friends?
But don’t forget to remember me
Cause I don’t want ours to end

There’s another motive for writing this letter
I have a confession to share
It’s kinda difficult to say
So can you pretend like you care?

I can’t believe I’m saying this
But I love you still to this day
People say I should get over it and hate you
But I just can’t see it that way

Although you have done wrong
And really hurt me too
I don’t think you’re a horrible person
And I certainly don’t hate you

Maybe I wasn’t clear
About what a relationship should be
Hopefully you’ll learn and won’t hurt another girl
Just like you hurt me

The biggest thing to know is
You don’t end it over something so small
That’s what breaks are for
That way you don’t loose it all

Please don’t think I’m pathetic
For not moving on in life
When I said I love you I meant it
I don’t want you to just pass me by

Well that’s all I had to say
So I guess I’ll just stop writing
Maybe one day I won’t miss you anymore
And I can finally stop crying

Love, The Broken Soul

© Copyright 2007 leah nelson - All Rights Reserved
hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-10-27 02:26 AM


Wow I loved this It was one of my favorites by you.. great job
Krysti

rebelangelv
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2 posted 2007-10-27 12:37 PM


awww thanx Krysti!
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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3 posted 2007-10-27 03:11 PM


umm, your so forgiving, it's nice to know that not all of humanities been lost.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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4 posted 2007-10-27 03:13 PM


ps, you have to hear this song, i think it's perfect for your situation, in fact all of you who look at this post and have ever felt even slightly like this must look at this song. you'll all relate.

-Kate

the song is "my dear" by new years day

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

rebelangelv
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5 posted 2007-10-27 03:16 PM


o well thank u. yea i just cant hate this person. i still love them and wayyy too much but i have no idea wy. i should just get over it and move on but its easier said then done.
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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6 posted 2007-10-27 03:21 PM


know that story like the back of my hand. live that story. even when he makes me mad i just can't be mad with him, it's almost sick. lol.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

rebelangelv
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7 posted 2007-10-27 03:24 PM


i know it sucks. but i guess its like that famous quote: if you cant get someone out of your head then maybe their supposed to be there
rebelangelv
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8 posted 2007-10-27 03:30 PM


just listened to the song! loved it its great. ive never heard of the band tho. ima look into it
hunnie_girl
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9 posted 2007-10-27 04:37 PM


if you cant get someone out of your head then maybe their supposed to be there~

haha they probably are... well I guess it's one of theose we'll never know kinda things
Krysti

rebelangelv
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10 posted 2007-10-27 06:57 PM


hahaha yea
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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11 posted 2007-10-27 07:53 PM


i love the song too- it's been a strange comfort to me many times.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

rebelangelv
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12 posted 2007-10-27 07:54 PM


yea i liked it. i added to my youtube pg.
justanotherstorm
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13 posted 2007-10-28 12:34 PM


hmm so y dont u just get over this person
they sound cruel

rebelangelv
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14 posted 2007-10-28 12:37 PM


idk it seems i can't. i just try not to think about it but i know that if they like actually wanted me back then id probably say yes like in a spilt second, i didnt wanna say i love you till i meant it ...and i did ....unfortuanately
they aint cruel just stupid. they ended it over sumthin little cuz they did something stupid. but not cruel...their my best friend

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15 posted 2007-10-28 12:48 PM


wow i hate this person now well w/e hope things work for the best for u 2
rebelangelv
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16 posted 2007-10-28 12:51 PM


y do u hate them?
i doubt n e thing will happen. they usually aint brave enough to make a move or n e thing unless theyre in their comfort zone. both times i figured out that they were into me.

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17 posted 2007-10-28 12:52 PM


hmm this person sounds stupid
rebelangelv
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18 posted 2007-10-28 12:54 PM


i dont think so. i just think inexperianced but w/e. everythings over now. i heard a rumor that they like me again but theyre actions toward me are the complete opposite. so idk i just dont think about it till my mind empties and i have nothing left to think about....then i just start writing.
justanotherstorm
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19 posted 2007-10-28 12:57 PM


they sound like theyre over it but idk
rebelangelv
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20 posted 2007-10-28 01:02 AM


how do u get that conclusion out of the simple things that ive said?
justanotherstorm
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21 posted 2007-10-28 01:04 AM


by your other poems
rebelangelv
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22 posted 2007-10-28 01:11 AM


well i dont even know if their over it so how can i show it in my work. and all of my work is old theres only a couple that ive written recently. interesting how u think that.
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23 posted 2007-10-28 01:15 AM


yeah well ive seen in through my friends
rebelangelv
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24 posted 2007-10-28 01:16 AM


ummm ok weird. well idk if ur guess is right or wrong. guess ill just find out for myself.
rebelangelv
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25 posted 2007-10-28 10:33 AM


u know i was thinking..u probably r right. it wasnt like im n e thing special or difficult to get over. n e 1 ive ever been involved w/ only played me or hurt me. its just when this person held me it actually felt like they would never let go. and when they told me they loved me and that no one else compared i actually believed it. guess that just makes me a petty girl. since u wont tell me ur gender im guessing ur a guy so u wouldnt really understnad the girls POV here.
justanotherstorm
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26 posted 2007-10-28 04:04 PM


hmm well idk maybe they still like u or w/e but i dont get your situation tho well yeah hmm
dah1namedj0na
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27 posted 2007-10-28 05:02 PM


ooooh i like the message of this poem!!! it's different from other ones in which people condescend about the past, rather than trying to move on. Keep up the good word!


rebelangelv
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28 posted 2007-10-28 05:45 PM


dah1namedj0na: thanx!!! im not sure wut u mean tho
justanotherstorm: idk either but thats life...cant know everything

justanotherstorm
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29 posted 2007-10-28 07:42 PM


yeah i guess
young_blood
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30 posted 2007-11-02 02:39 AM


i can totally relate to this. you were good and clear in your communication. the only thing that bothered me was that you ripped a line off of fergie in the opening lines. other than that, well done. keep writing!
rebelangelv
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31 posted 2007-11-02 06:56 PM


thanx ummmm i dont really listen to fergie that much...which line did i rip off? well n e ways i didnt mean it and still dont cuz i dont which one it is lol but yea thanx so much!
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32 posted 2007-11-12 10:01 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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