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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-10-23 10:18 PM


drowning, im all alone
will i be missed
ill never have the chance
to give you all i promised
so please forgive me
as i say goodbye
please dont forget me
keep me in mind

if it has to come to this
im sorry


hey baby have you heard
ive gone missing without a word
are you worried
do you even care
or is it a burden you cant bear

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Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
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that So Cal
1 posted 2007-10-24 12:23 PM


Correct me if I'm wrong. Your words, at first, seem to be speaking of suicide. But you seem to be speaking of something else.

Nice choice of words:
"hey baby have you heard
ive gone missing without a word"

Just curious... Are these lyrics to a song?

The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates

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Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2007-10-24 07:00 AM


yes they are lyrics. but, as you know, poetry can use words that have diffrent meanings to each person that reads it, (and if its good) it lets you walk away with a certain message. thats whats so great about it.     and i was just talking about going missing without a trace
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
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Australia
3 posted 2007-10-24 07:20 AM


I think i'd notice if u went missing.. I dont need to ppl to disappear in one year..
Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN
4 posted 2007-10-24 04:31 PM


haha im not goin anywhere
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