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Angel101¢¾! Junior Member
since 2007-10-21
Posts 48Lost in pain |
love is more precious than gold adorned in diamonds, more giving than anything on this earth, it is more loyal than a old hound dog.love is beautiful especially when i'm in love with you |
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Angel101¢¾! Junior Member
since 2007-10-21
Posts 48Lost in pain |
sorry that the poem is so short! |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
There's nothing wrong with a poem being short. In fact, being able to fit meaning and/or emotion into a few words is an art. Um... Watch out for grammar and you might want to think about seperating the lines, unless you purposely did that. The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I agree with Assassin_of_Verse on watching the grammar (although mine isn't perfect either) and separating the lines. It's a little harder to read with the lines bunched together like this, maybe stanzas would be better? Also, I'm kind of curious as to why you write, actually I'm curious on why everyone writes. Is it because you write to express your feelings or you write for your audience or... Just wondering... I enjoyed reading your poem, thank you for sharing  ~Stargal "The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away" @-->--- |
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