Speaking Prayers, Sleeping Eyes.... (Repost)

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Speaking Prayers, Sleeping Eyes.... (Repost)

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-10-21 09:54 PM

STOP, please help me, I’m losing control.
I’ve fallen off the edge of serenity and now I lay lifeless in a hole.
My blood is full of hatred, and I’m afraid I’ll hurt someone if I’m not cured
I want to share the hurt I feel, and to you I am lured.

I’ll spin you into my web of lies,
I’ll break your heart to my command you will abide
You wait til I have you firmly under my thumb
I’ll leave your body cold and numb.

I’ll hold you closely whilst you drink poison from my cup.
Scream and shout if you must, but please learn that it’s better to give up.
Let me torture you the same way these voices torture me
Maybe then next time when I ask for help you won’t flee.

Somebody save me from the person I have become
Teach me how to be a nice little girl who goes shopping with her mum
Let me be taught respect and manners to the highest form of degree
Then watch me focus on my schooling and appreciate the true me

So as you go to sleep tonight say a little prayer for me, the girl that isn’t sleeping
For she is lying in her bed shaking whilst she is weeping
Pray that somebody will save her and that she will learn to live
Then maybe one day you will learn to appreciate exactly what she must live with

This one is an oldie but i think one of my best.. Just seeing if i can get some more critique on this piece.. This was also named by the one and only Tempest who is no longer around but he still lingers in spirit..

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2007-10-21 10:45 PM

spirit is an understatment, lol. but i think i seem to remember this certain piece. its still as amazing as the first time i read it. Great Job

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2007-10-22 12:20 PM

yea Tempest will always be here with us no matter what... Jess I liked this one, it was one of your best I think as well.
Krysti

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

3 posted 2007-10-24 02:19 AM

Wow...

This is something else. If there is anything to be improved, I am too inadequate to spot it.

Great job.

The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates

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